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Jay Allen Ford's avatar

The wordplay and internal rhymes are impressive. Phrases like ‘desire is festering and guilt is glistening’ are vivid and can make you wince. The uneven line breaks add a ticking-clock rhythm—like a train nearing a crash. Great job!

Jeanne Vessantra's avatar

Love, or is it not love?

Is it only an endless spiral -

blurring, tightening,

within me,

taking me aback?

Black, black crystals becoming.

Light.

Light turning dark.

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